Thursday, September 09, 2010

IF: Dessert

So I'm doing something I don't ever do. I'm posting my sketch because I don't think I will be able to finish the final on time (before Friday and the end of this topic). But I would LOVE to have some good constructive critiques on my composition. Should I add anything? Should I take away something. Click on the picture for a close up view. Any bad tangents? Mmmm....Dessert!

11 comments:

Linda Hensley said...

I love that you even consider bad tangents! This looks fun, and I'm guessing it will look great in color.

emilywilsondesigns said...

Fantastic work... I love the energy!

Lisa Graves said...

Shawna- I am LOVING this sketch. Its fabulous- can't wait to see it in color!

Leen Christens said...

The sketch looks pretty great good to me! Your composition makes it feel like a cozy shop stuffed with delicious deserts. I think it looks perfectly balanced. The closet makes a great curious space with very interesting details.

Natura said...

This is great. Wonderful details.

Jennifer said...

The composition is wonderful!

Mary Hall said...

What a great sketch! Have fun with the colour...

Lara said...

Mmmm, this picture makes me hungry. I love the variety of desserts! :) I also love the three desserts in the foreground, it really helps to frame the picture. I hesitate to make a critique because I am not an art expert by any means and so I don't really know what to look for specifically as far as composition and balance, it looks great to me. Plus, I could never even hope to draw anything so amazing, so I am not one to talk. However, I will say that the only thing I feel is a little off is the witch's left hand. My eyes are having a hard time accepting the angle/direction of her hand and I feel like I should be able to see all five fingers. Maybe I am just looking at it the wrong way. I would also make the cake she is carrying not quite so tilted. I like a little tilt because it keeps it whimsical, but I can't help feeling like I need to shout out, "Careful, your gorgeous cake is going to splat on the floor!" (that may just be my OCD coming out :) Anyway, that is my critique. Take what you will from it, and even if you take nothing from it I will still think this is a wonderful piece!

Shawna said...

Lara, your critique is AWESOME!! Thanks so much! Loves.

Calista said...

I love it! What a fun idea - the witch with her beautiful cakes out front and her poison and potions in the closet! Love it!

Bethany and Thomas said...

I love this sketch! I especially love all the delicious looking treats in the glass case and the details in the back room. Looks yummy! I can just imagine the lovely lass skipping in with the cake and then tripping and having a smashed cake disaster all over the place... delightful.